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Dating Profile Examples—Writing a first sentence that gets her hooked

Make your dating profile hook a girl from the start.

This dating profile example is too boring. You want your first paragraph to hook her.

If a girl doesn’t like the first part of your profile, she’s going to hit the Delete button and be done with you.

So you have to knock her out of her zone, hook her, and make her keep reading.

So how do you make yourself stand out right away?

How to make your dating profile hook a girl from the start.

Too many men start out their profiles with the same boring thing. And if you’ve read many profiles from women on online dating sites, you know they all start to sound the same.

Today I’m going to do a case study on the beginning of a profile for one of the guys I’m working with and show you what you can do to make your profile start out with a bang.

Hello. I am a good hearted single guy looking to find that special someone. The words to describe me would be kind, loving, friendly, caring, understanding, loyal, supportive and compassionate. I also try to be spontaneous at times.

Alright, this isn’t a bad start, better than some I’ve seen. The only problem is that it doesn’t make me want to read more.

When writing your dating profile, think as if you are sitting there talking to the girl.

A greeting is fine. Something like Hi, Hello, Hey works. BUT, you need to continue with that conversation and talk to her like as if you are there watching her look at your profile.

Here’s a better first line:

Hey, great to see you here. I must have passed your picture test. What do you think of the one of me on the water buffalo?

See what we are doing here? We’re talking with her as if we were there with her. And we ask a question. The guys I’ve worked with have had women stop right there and answer his question.

And understand that my goal has always been to get women to send me a message first. It makes the seduction so much easier.

The Mistake Most Guys Make

Most guys describe themselves in the beginning of their profiles. This isn’t the way you want to start.

What I’d like to see you do is continue to talk to her. you can get into who you are and what you want later. For now, keep it fun and different.

Hey, great to see you here. I suppose I passed your picture test. Any idea what that is I’m riding? Send me a quick guess.

Tell you what, while you send me a message or continue reading my profile, I’m going to take the dogs for a walk. See you in a few.

This is A LOT different than most dating profiles. And I works to get women to send you a message or respond to yours.

The psychology behind starting your online dating profile this way

First of all, it’s DIFFERENT.

Second, it engages her. We make her think. We snap her out of that catatonic state she’s in when she reads dating profiles.

Third, we tell suggest that her options are to read our profile or send us a message. We don’t “give” her the option of leaving our profile.

I’ll show you some more on how to make that BORING LIST OF YOUR QUALITIES into something that makes women really want to get to know you tomorrow.

And guys, if you don’t already have it, I’d suggest you buy Magnetic Profiles, my copy and paste book on writing profiles. It simplifies writing your profile into a step-by-step system.

For a great post on HOW to write your profile and more examples, click here.